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ielts writing task-2 Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common

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sabita thapa

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Stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common.

What do you think are the causes of this?

What solutions can you suggest?


Many people are increasingly suffering from sicknesses as a result of stress. This essay will discuss the main cause of this stress-related health issue is longer working hour and in order to solve this problem individuals should maintain work-life balance.

The primary cause associated with people experiencing mental health issues caused by stress such as anxiety, depression is because they tend to work more than normal hours. People often place themselves in an unfavourable situation where they have to spend more time to fulfil their responsibilities and prove themselves as competitors. This is because to gain promotion and earn more money in order to maintain luxurious lifestyle. As a result, they become victims of various diseases associated with stress. For example, in China, majority of people work long hour to achieve promotion and increased and at the same time they suffered from strain and other psychological disorders.

To mitigate this issue, one’s ought to improve work-life balance. This means that every person needs rest after certain hours of work because their brain could not handle and work effectively without proper rest. Therefore, they should find out the appropriate strategies to manage the time at work and give sufficient time for themselves so that they can relax and spend time with their loved ones. The result of this would be better performance at work and positive impact on individual’s life. For instance, people in Germany are healthier in terms of stress because they often give emphasis for maintaining work-life balance.

In conclusion, in today’s fast paces world more and more people are becoming ill due to stress. Spending more than normal hours at work is considered to be the principal reason for this problem, however this can be tackled by managing better work-life harmony.
 
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englishgeek

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Many people are increasingly suffering from sicknesses health conditions as a result of stress. This essay will discuss the main cause of this stress-related health issue which is longer working hours and in order to solve this problem individuals should maintain work-life balance. (1)

The primary cause associated with people experiencing mental health issues caused by stress such as anxiety, depression is because they tend to work more than normal hours. People often place themselves in an unfavourable situations where they have to spend more time to fulfil their responsibilities and prove themselves as competitors. This is because to gain promotion and earn more money in order to maintain luxurious lifestyle. As a result, they become victims of various diseases associated with stress. For example, in China, the majority of people work long hours to achieve promotion and (increased and ?) at the same time they suffered from strain and other psychological disorders.

To mitigate this issue, one’s ought to improve work-life balance. This means that every person needs rest after certain hours of work because their brain could not handle and work effectively without proper rest. Therefore, they should find out the appropriate strategies to manage the time at work and give sufficient time for themselves so that they can relax and spend time with their loved ones. The result of this would be better performance at work and positive impact on an individual’s life. For instance, people in Germany are healthier in terms of stress because they often give emphasis for maintaining work-life balance.

In conclusion, in today’s fast paces world more and more people are becoming ill due to stress. Spending more than normal hours at work is considered to be the principal reason for this problem, however this can be tackled by managing better work-life harmony.

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(1) This sentence needs to be rewritten. In the opening paragraph I would paraphrase the topic and perhaps give a couple of examples which cause stress which you will discuss further. The question says "what are the causes?" so you should think of a few different causes rather than limiting yourself to just one.

As I said I would try to give at least two examples of what causes stress and not just focus on the one problem.