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Hermione granger

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The line graph compares three particular museums in terms of the number of tourists in four months during the summer of 2013.

Overall, while the number of British museum monthly travellers fluctuated and Natural History museum’s fell, the figures for Science museum increased, albeit slightly throughout the period shown. In addition, that year witnessed the prevalence of British museum for visitors while the least popular destination was recorded for Science museum.

It can be seen from the chart that in the middle of 2013, 600 thousand people visited British museum, which was slightly more than the number of Natural History museum visitors. While the figures for British museum increased dramatically to its peak of 750 thousand travellers in July, the opposite was true for the latter with its bottom of under 400 thousand visitors. Science Museum additionally experienced a slight decrease during the same period.

In August, both British museum and Science lost its popularity with fewer tourists while the number of people visiting Natural History museum remained stable. In the last month of the period, British museum, Natural History museum and Science museum all attracted more travellers with a significant rise to 650 thousand visitors, 470 thousand visitors and 450 thousand visitors respectively.
 

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The line graph compares three particular museums in terms of the number of tourists in four months during the summer of 2013.

Overall, while the number of British Museum's monthly travellers fluctuated and the Natural History Museum’s fell, the figures for the Science Museum increased, albeit slightly throughout the period shown. In addition, that year witnessed the prevalence(1) of British museum for visitors while the least popular destination was recorded for the Science Museum.

It can be seen from the chart that in the middle of 2013, 600 thousand people visited the British museum, which was slightly more than the number of Natural History museum visitors. While the figures for British museum increased dramatically to its peak of 750 thousand travellers in July, the opposite was true for the latter with its bottom of under 400 thousand visitors. The Science Museum additionally experienced a slight decrease during the same period.

In August, both the British museum and Science Museum lost its popularity with fewer tourists while the number of people visiting the Natural History Museum remained stable. In the last month of the period, the British museum, Natural History Museum and Science museum all attracted more travellers with a significant rise to 650 thousand visitors, 470 thousand visitors and 450 thousand visitors respectively.

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(1) I don't think this is the correct usage of prevalence here. Definition: the fact that something is very common or happens often.

I don't believe 'traveller' is a good synonym for visitor. Many local people visit museums also. "patron" might be something you could use.

You should use the same words in the graph with the same case, such as the "Science Museum".