Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products tha

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Rachelvy

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This age is being developed and modern by human. Commodities are invented and released to the market at the sametime. The products are advertised on TV and the social media platform to introduce comsumers. However, Several people don't completely believe in new product and feel unecessary to buy them. Others think they are convenient and can help us to improve the daily life problems to be better. Thus, This ideas will explained in my essay.

To my perspective, many people don't really like the new products on the advertisement.They think the commodities won't extremely good at all. For instance, on Youtube or Facebook, it happens many new or re-design products.One of them is mainly knife.The introducer shows the benefit of knife like it is versatile to cut the food.But when the users buy it , it doesn't look like on the advert that make people can't believe in the advertised products and think they are unconvenient.

On the other hands, the product will be a helpful tool to support the comsumers.For instance, the housewives actually need the cooked products to help them easily to make and process the food. On the internet, the company releases many cooked equipments like garlic grinder, blender and especially whisk,... With the appearance of the cooked equipment, the housewives lessen the strenuous part in cooking.In the past , they did have to chop the garlic or mince meat by their hands but nowadays, they just need to use the garlic grinder or take out the meat grinder , they finish at once.

To conclude,with the comtemporary age , many new and strange products are invented and advertised to support the users to improve their lives.
 

englishgeek

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This age is being developed and modern by human.(1) Commodities(2) Products are invented and released to the market at the same time. The products are advertised on TV and the social media platform to introduced to consumers. However, several people don't completely believe in new products and feel that it is unnecessary to buy them. Others think they are convenient and can help us to improve the our daily life lives problems to be better. Thus, This ideas will explained in my essay.

To From my perspective, many people don't really like the new products on the advertisements. They think the commodities won't be extremely good at all. For instance, on Youtube or Facebook, it happens many new or re-design products. One of them is mainly knife. The introducer presenter shows the benefit of the knife, like it is versatile to cut the food. But when the users buy it , it doesn't look like the same as in on the advert that makes people can't not believe in the advertised products and think they are unconvenient worthless.

On the other hands, the product will be a helpful tool to support the comsumers. For instance, the housewives actually need the cookinged products to help them easily to make and process the food. On the internet, the company releases many cooking ed equipments utensils like garlic grinder, blender and especially whisk,... With the appearance of the cooked equipment, the housewives lessen the strenuous part in cooking. In the past, they did have to chop the garlic or mince meat by their hands but nowadays, they just need to use the garlic grinder or take out the meat grinder, they finish at once.

To conclude, with the comtemporary age, many new and strange products are invented and advertised to support the users to improve their lives.

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1. This sentence doesn't make any sense.

2. Commodities usually refers to things which are traded in large volumes: iron ore, copper, coffee, corn.

I don't think you addressed the topic very well unfortunately.

I would suggest first making a couple of points for and and against the topic as way to plan your essay. Make sure your points/arguments are logical and address the topic.

Be careful not to make statements that are just so obvious, such as: "Products are invented and released to the market at the same time. The products are advertised on TV and the social media platform to introduced to consumers"

Always add a space after a period (full stop).